GABE CAN HELP?

So here are a few songs with humorous spoken additions I’d like feedback on (including if the feedback is “cut it’.)

Famous is about how fame is all I want, but it’s nothing like the life I’d actually want to live. I just love attention.

Anyway, the intro kind of goes through the rise and fall of someone famous through the perspective of others - media outlets, critics, and regular people. I’ll be looking to have these recorded by some voice actor friends, so this one won’t be all me.

Add Up (Killer Whales) is a stupid song about me being stupid, in an enlightened sort of way. There’s a David Attenborough bit, someone leaving me a voicemail (may end up being me), and then a line as the whale itself.

Similarly to Famous, This Is Hell is about how I love being in LA, even though it’s not always the best place to be.

[I promise all of the songs aren’t the same concept - it’s really just these two]

The intro is meant to be an advertisement circa 1950’s for the city. The tune is a placeholder that I wrote years ago, but I may keep it in…

Ooh Ahh is a bit of a tribute to early YouTube - like “My Hands Are Bananas” or Liam Lynch’s Whatever. It was meant to have the group Run The Fools feature on it, but those bozos just bailed, so it’ll be me. I’m open to changing anything and everything about this song.

IN CONCLUSION

I mostly want to get this thing done. If you have any thoughts on what would or wouldn’t make these better or more effective, I’d love to hear them.